1. Rough Draft of Essay #3: https://docs.google.com/a/une.edu/document/d/1MZ-xkQFBh7kEF76c9-XSRKdPUIqvDPbMtdrI84cU5NY/edit?usp=sharing
2. Final Draft of Essay #3: https://docs.google.com/document/d/15W9SF1udzBNVW8_-p5xIWF3ZASgFtcmlJw2te9tJEL8/edit
3. Annotations and key material for Essay:
The first two images were from the Charles Duhigg excerpt read in class. The last image was from the Anne Hallward Ted Talk that the class had to make into a document. Material from these images were used in the works of Essay #3.
4. Learning Outcome 1: Nancy Sommers talks about inexperienced writers and experienced writers during the revision process. Over the course of this class I have transitioned into a somewhat experienced writer. I would not say I am ultimately there yet, but I am close. In my transition from my rough draft to my final draft I changed my ideas and moved some things around. Most of my major work did not come until I continued onto my final draft. For the rough draft I wanted to create a very strong base so I could build strong ideas off of my strong and arguable thesis. My goal for my final draft was to ultimately receive a B+ however I received a B- but that is still a good grade. The difference between inexperienced and experienced writers is a lot of things actually. Inexperienced writers do not want to start over and they believe that the rough draft is the final copy with a few errors to fix. In reality, a rough draft is simply laying your ideas out on paper, organizing them, and then writing a short base draft. That is what a rough draft should be and I feel that I finally accomplished that in writing my final essay for this course. I decided to change my introduction and my thesis along the writing process of just my rough draft. I changed the introduction again from rough to final as well. In doing these actions it bettered my writing and created a strong base for my examples and argument.
Learning Outcome 2: For the final draft of essay number three I used the best sources from this course to support my arguable thesis. I used Charles Duhigg’s piece, “From Civil Rights to Megachurches”, Anne Hallward’s Ted Talk, “How Telling Our Silenced Stories Can Change the World”, and Bill McKibben’s “Do The Math”. These pieces provided strong reinforcement for the argument that I was trying to explain. Charles Duhigg, Anne Hallward, and Bill Mckibben all created their own way of Social Change. Each of their ways can be attributed in aiding a way to create a new way of social Change. Their ideas all incorporated into one single way of Social Change could change the world as we know it. Here is one example I used from Bill McKibben:
McKibben also said, “If the world worked in a kind of rational way, we wouldn’t have to be here” (6:50). He means to say that if the world got rid of all the harm we are doing to it we, as humans, would not have to be here fighting for a change and fighting for the world to realize we need to change. He can only do so much, and we need to start making others believe that we need to make a change for the future. (4)
Incorporating his ideas into my writing bettered my essay because it allowed a second opinion on the issue. Having the reader read someones opinion other than mine on Climate Change really shows the reader that Climate Change is not going away anytime soon and it is a rising issue for not just the country, but the world.
Learning Outcome 5 and 6:
Using MLA format to incorporate the ideas of others into one’s writing is a major key to successful writing. It allows the reader to read another opinion on the matter that is not your opinion. Local errors such as grammar and punctuation are also key factors to having great writing. Without these three major keys one’s writing will not be as strong as it could potentially be. In my Essay #3 I incorporated many ideas from others and one of those ideas is below.
In her Ted Talk Hallward said, “They talk to their partner, their best friend, their family, and that’s wonderful. That’s really what we hope for. That’s what I would call the process of individual healing” (8:00). Hallward saying that speaking out is the process of individual healing is very true. Speaking out to the radio station is individual healing too, it is just anonymous and easier for those who do not trust even their closest friends. This process of speaking out can be used in a different way as well. Speaking out and getting one’s voice out their for climate change and saving the Earth is extremely beneficial. (3)
As you can see I used Anne Hallward’s actions of creating a safe space to talk about as a way of speaking up. Speaking up in the world about climate change can turn many heads and could ultimately start a movement. It only takes one person to speak up about an issue and that can start a chain reaction of bettering the world.
